Sunday, September 7, 2008

The unexpected meeting by Ryan W

As Tanis half-elven wandered through the forest of darken wood scouting ahead for any goblins or draconian forces waiting in the tree. Although he knew he and his friends were safe from any outside danger he was still worried about the spirits that guard the area. Just as he thought their was no danger and started to walk away his keen woodsmen skills kicked in and he heard a tree branch snap under a foot. He quietly hid in a nearby bush and knocked a single arrow to his sturdy yew bow. As he silently in the bush a shadow in the shape of a man cast out to the clearing and a man stepped through. Tanis had slowly walked up to the man and placed the tip of his arrow at the mans spine.

“Who are you and what is your business in darken wood.” Calmly ask Tanis.
“My name is Okonkwo I am in these woods for me and my family have been cast out of our village and I am in search of food and clean water.” The man replied.

“Well I see you are not of these parts and are no danger to me and my friends.” Tanis said while placing his arrow back into his quiver. As okonkwo turn to see the man who had been asking all the questions he let out a quick gasp.

“Whaa..Whaa….what are you. You look not of this world.” Okonkwo asked while taking a step backwards.

“I am Tanis half-elven. As my name states im part elven and you sir are in one of the most dangerous forest in all the land. You might wish to stay near me or I fear you will lose your life.” Tanis stated “why have you been cast out of your village sir if you don’t mind me asking.”

“I did not heed the oracles word and killed a man who was staying with me in fear of looking weak in front of my clans men. Then I was taking part in a ceremony and my gun exploded killing a clans men. This sir is a crime in my village and was cast out for 7 years in order to atone for my actions.” Okonkwo said.

“I see, well if your family is important to you I suggest you do not come to these woods in search of food and water for this forest is cursed.” Tanis suggested.

The forest had darkened around them and a death like chill creaped out of the forest edge. Tanis quickly pulled okonkwo close to him and handed him a sword.

“Take this it wont do you good verse this enemy but it will help hold them back” Tanis said.

Just then a low rolling fog settled in and ghost like figures surrounded them. Just then they heard the spidery language of the magic “shirak!”. A bright un earthly light burst into existence and cast away the ghostly figures and a man walked to Tanis and okonkwo.

“Tanis please come with me the forest master has asked for us. Who is this man his he any danger to you?” raistlin asked

“No, he is just lost and needs to rid himself of these cursed woods.” Tanis replied

At the end of speaking raistlin once again spoke the spidery language of magic and okonkwo was transported to the edge of darken wood.

“What a strange land this is.” Okonkwo said as he tried adjusting his eyes to the now brightly lit area around him. Just as he had finally adjusted to the light a white stag ran off into another set of woods and okonkwo knocked an arrow to his bow and ran off into the new forest after the stag.

3 comments:

Anonymous said...

I felt this story was a good interaction between the characters. In this story his description was very well written. I remember how the characters first reacted when meeting each other and how scared Okonkwo was. I could see what the half half-elven looked like. The story made me think of how these two characters stories were very different.

Yes, the conversation seemed real. Their feelings toward each other made them seems real.

My fav.part of the story was when they told the other character their story and how each reacted.

“I am Tanis half-elven. As my name states im part elven and you sir are in one of the most dangerous forest in all the land. You might wish to stay near me or I fear you will lose your life.” Tanis stated “why have you been cast out of your village sir if you don’t mind me asking.”

“I did not heed the oracles word and killed a man who was staying with me in fear of looking weak in front of my clans men. Then I was taking part in a ceremony and my gun exploded killing a clans men. This sir is a crime in my village and was cast out for 7 years in order to atone for my actions.” Okonkwo said.

“I see, well if your family is important to you I suggest you do not come to these woods in search of food and water for this forest is cursed.” Tanis suggested."

One thing i found problematic was how they got so close and trusted each other right away. and i think some of their actions could have been told more.

Anonymous said...

I felt this story was a good interaction between the characters. In this story his description was very well written. I remember how the characters first reacted when meeting each other and how scared Okonkwo was. I could see what the half half-elven looked like. The story made me think of how these two characters stories were very different.

Yes, the conversation seemed real. Their feelings toward each other made them seems real.

My fav.part of the story was when they told the other character their story and how each reacted.

“I am Tanis half-elven. As my name states im part elven and you sir are in one of the most dangerous forest in all the land. You might wish to stay near me or I fear you will lose your life.” Tanis stated “why have you been cast out of your village sir if you don’t mind me asking.”

“I did not heed the oracles word and killed a man who was staying with me in fear of looking weak in front of my clans men. Then I was taking part in a ceremony and my gun exploded killing a clans men. This sir is a crime in my village and was cast out for 7 years in order to atone for my actions.” Okonkwo said.

“I see, well if your family is important to you I suggest you do not come to these woods in search of food and water for this forest is cursed.” Tanis suggested."

One thing i found problematic was how they got so close and trusted each other right away. and i think some of their actions could have been told more.

Anonymous said...

I -i really like this story. it is very different. i can remember the whole story. it was much different then the others i have read. i can see thw hole story playing throughout my head.

II - the conversation seems to be very real. thhe way tha chacaters talked seemed to make them real.

III. the whole story was good, i liked all of it. “My name is Okonkwo I am in these woods for me and my family have been cast out of our village and I am in search of food and clean water.” The man replied. this is one example of this story being very true. it is made to sound like the villegers.

IV - i found nothing to be distracting.